Top class report young fella. Much appreciated and I'm a Bristol supporter. I'm 63 myself and have been trying to write for 40 years now. So far I've earned £5 in a cheque that I didn't cash.
But who needs money when someone expresses their thanks and pleasure?
Keep up the writing. Advice? Keep it simple. Read it back over and over again, it can always be improved and never stop dreaming! And writing. And watching or playing rugby football!